A bit bland might be true but that also means that it has a relatively clean or 'corporate' look about it, which should appeal to the target client. I think that you should congratulate yourself with the work you've done so far, given that you have other things on the go. We all know how difficult it can be to find the time to develop our
website hostings - I've got parked domains I bought decades (well, ok, not DECADES) ago, still kicking around without any sort of meat on them.
However, of far graver concern is the fact that you've put something out there advertising your business which is potential harmful to that business. I'm sure that it's just because you were rushing, and I know that it's time-consuming to check, but your
website hosting is littered with grammatical and spelling errors. Corporate clients aren't impressed when the
website hosting of a company that hopes to design visitors'
website hostings is let down by a lack of attention to detail.
"Well," they'd say. "If they show such little attention to detail to their own
website hosting, what will they do to a
website hosting that isn't theirs?"
For example, on your 'Why M&M Web Design' page:
Here at M&M Web Design (Nottingham), we pride ourselves on being able to provide the right solution to fit our customers needs. We do not sell pre-packaged products which you have to fit your business into. We design bespoke solutions, tailor made to suit your needs. If that is not enough to convince you then check below for some more pratical reasons.
Better:
Here at M&M Web Design (Nottingham), we pride ourselves on being able to provide the right solution to fit our
customers' needs.
We do not sell pre-packaged products, into which you have to fit your business. We design bespoke solutions,
tailor-made to suit your needs. If that is not enough to convince you
, then check below for some more
practical reasons.
I'm not trying to tear you apart and I think you've done a great programming job (and general design as well, for my money) but you just need to brush up on your copywriting skills. To a fickle bastard like me (and there's plenty of us about), the difference between getting a job and a competitor stealing it can be as little as a couple of spelling errors on your
website hosting.
Any mistakes in this posting are because I am a) not bidding for business (but feel free to PM me if you want some copy written or reworked), and b) obviously a bloody hypocrite, so please: no-one need bother to point out my errors.
